The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

20 minutes, 150 words at least.

Answer:

The horizontal bar graph compares the production and consumption of electricity, measured in billion kWh, (put between two commas – like a modifier) in ten major countries of the world in the year 2014. The unit is measured in billion kWh.

Overall, the greatest amount of the energy was produced and consumed in China and the United States. (there can be only ONE greatest) There was a marginal difference for these between all other countries. Moreover, the production surpasses the consumption. (These are not overall statements.)

Did you notice that GERMANY is an exception? It consumed more than it produced?

Electricity produced by China, about 5.398 units, was slightly (I see a huge difference.) above than that of America. (China produced 5398 units of electricity which was 1300 units more than that of the second largest producer, the USA.) This is followed by Russia, Japan, and India, which (supplied to whom? Wrong word.) supplied produced 1057, 936.2 and 871 units of the power, respectively. The remaining countries: Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea Republic released about 618.9 to 485.1 units of electricity. You’re not supposed to state everything. You should mention MAIN FEATURES and TRENDS only. The Republic of Korea was the smallest producer of electricity among these countries.

Missing paragraph on consumption.

China consumed the largest amount of electricity followed by the United States. Russia used less than one-third of the electricity consumed by the US. It was followed by Japan, India, and Germany. The Korea Republic consumed the least amount of electricity.

Note that you can’t change PRODUCE and CONSUME to suit the requirements of LR. This carries the risk of miscommunication since the replacement may fail to communicate the message. I suggest repeating these words.

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