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IELTS Essay Correction: University Education Should Be Free.

In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford it and some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Students who want to pursue higher education are required to pay a huge tuition fee, which is unaffordable by for most of them (avoid repeating studentsstudents. A section of society is convinced that university education ought to be offered free of cost for everyone. However, in my opinion, it is not entirely beneficial to provide free tertiary education as it directly impacts the quality.

Primarily, there has to be an emphasis on the quality of education provided. This and this requires monetary support. (provided is unnecessary. Connect the two sentences using AND.) The government is devoid of adequate funds needed to equip universities. Therefore, it is imperative for students to pay the hefty tuition fees in order to construct state-of-the-art laboratories and maintain existing infrastructure. Qualified and experienced professors demand a high salary. These costs are met by the tuition fee, which also facilitates funding for research projects.

While the sentences in the above paragraph are well written and there are few grammar mistakes. It is weak in the clear and logical development of ideas. In the first sentence, you’ve jumped by connecting quality of education and monetary support. Let us connect them in the following fashion – Quality of education – infrastructure – teachers – monetary support.

Primarily, there has to be an emphasis on the quality of education which requires state-of-the-art infrastructure and excellent teachers. The governments these days are devoid of funds necessary to build modern laboratories and classrooms. Also, there is little financial support for hiring the best talent. For instance, the top public institutions in India such as AIIMS and IIT are always short of the budget since the government of India does not have sufficient money. Hence, charges higher fees to students is the only viable way to offer world-class education.

Second, there is a shortage of students with vocational skills. (This is not an idea statement.) In addition to basic core skills like literacy, numeracy, and communication, the economy also requires trained plumbers, electricians etc. Offering free tertiary education might lessen funding to vocational training. (This is idea statement. – 1) It has been observed in recent decades that around one-half of the students graduating from a university take up jobs that do not require a university degree. Hence, it is unacceptable to divert most funds to a university as the economy requires a balanced proportion of both university graduates and skilled individuals.

1. Please note that you need to put your idea and related explanation in a logical format. Put the idea first and then explain it. Secondly, offering free university education will reduce funding for vocational education drastically. There is a severe shortage of students with practical skills such as plumbing, MRI, and ultrasound. Since most governments are short of funds, financing university courses such as Law and Languages will drain the funds for these courses.

Finally, citizens might have to pay more tax (for what? The sentence is incomplete in logical sense. – 2) thereby placing a financial burden on them. As a result, the government may have to compromise budgets allotted for health care and efficient public transport(If citizens may more tax, how is the government budget disturbed?)

2. Finally, if universities offer free education and governments support them financially, the citizens will have to bear the cost through higher taxes.

This paragraph is half cooked and it is perhaps because it was developed quickly. 

In conclusion, countries with free tuition policies seem to be experiencing issues in the quality of graduates and dearth of sufficient skilled people. Although higher education may bridge inequality, it does not guarantee improvement and could harm the society further. A conclusion is meant to conclude the ideas mentioned in the body paragraphs. Your body paragraphs have no mention of countries, quality of graduates (you talk about quality of education), inequality, harm to society. However, you can link these themes in the following manner.

In conclusion, offering free university education will severely restrict a country’s capacity to finance vocational education while impacting the quality of education. This will likely increase inequality in society and may harm social harmony and peace.

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