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IELTS Academic Task 1 Correction: Sales Made By A Coffee Shop.

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 

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40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

The given table illustrates weekday business of a coffee shop situated in an office building. Overall, it is evident that sales are maximum from 7.30 to 10.30 am for all the items except sandwiches sold at the shop (= sales. Mentioned earlier.). 

To begin with, Coffee is purchased maximum from 7.30 to 10.30 in the morning which accounts to for 265 sales (need to mention sales only once.) of the total of 795 sales. Whereas, it fluctuates around 200 for the rest time of the day. (145 is not even close to 200. – 1) Even, (Wrong connector. What is the need for EVEN?) Tea sales had touched touch (wrong tense. Use Simple Present Tense.) the highest of 110 between 7.30 to 10.30 am which later showed dip in the hours ahead to reach the minimum of 35 from 2.30 to 5.30 pm and is the lowermost value in the chart. 

1. Since there is a lot of data and the question says “main features”, you should stick to maximum and minimum. The figure drops to the lowest between 2:30 and 5:30 pm (from 2:30 to 5:30 pm).

On the other hand, (Wrong cohesive device. The time slot stays the same. It is not changing. There is no contrast. Prefer Similarly.) Similarly, between 7.30 to and 10.30 (2) Pastries had have (wrong tense) 275 out of 600 total sales and both are the topmost value in the table. (3) Sandwiches follow the exception of only 50 (4) sold between 7.30 to 10.30 and about 200 sold in the 10.30 to 2.30 time slot. (You’ve just stated the numbers and not “main features”.)

2. Note the two constructions: Between X and Y; From X to Y. Do not mix them.

3. Note that the question is about “Main Features” and “Comparisons”. It is not about numbers. Now, you have two main features. Between 7:30 to 10:30 am, the number of pastries sold are the highest and this is also the highest among all items. Let us put them in one sentence: Similarly, the number of pastries sold during this time slot is the highest during the whole day and it is also the maximum among all articles.

4. This figure is not important. Stick to the maximum and the minimum. Unlike other products, most of the sandwiches are sold between 10:30 am and 2:30 pm and the least are sold from 2:30 to 5:30 pm.

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