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IELTS Essay Correction: Right Age To Drive.

Most countries allow 18 years old to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age, while others think that the age to start driving a car should be at least 25. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

There are different age limits for driving in different parts of the world. According to some people, 25 is the most appropriate age for driving whereas some others think that one should be allowed to drive when he turns it is 18 (Use it to refer back to the most appropriate age.). I will discuss both views, but as per me (Of course you will discuss both views. That’s the question. You need not write this. Directly shoot the opinion.) I believe that 25 should be the eligible age for driving on roads.

On the one hand, teenagers (wrong word choice – teenagers refer to those between ages of 13 to 19. LR issue.) should be given the permission to drive because they possess quick-learning nature. It is true that teenagers they (no need to write the subject again. Use a pronoun to refer back to it.) have better cognitive abilities as opposed to people in the mid-20s above their age (wrong comparison. Make a clear comparison with people above 25.). This was is evident from an article published by Oxford University which mentioned that people of this age are capable of acquiring new skills at a much faster speed than any other age group. (This is not an example. You’ve written the same sentence by using Oxford University. A recent research paper by Oxford University revealed that while those in late teens learn driving in 48 hours, as age increases this ability takes more than a week.) So, if 18-year-olds, with proper instructions, are taught driving with adequate instructions, they will become skilled drivers in the future which may also result in the decrease of in road accidents.

Though there are numerous referencing, LR and TR (example) issues in the above paragraph, you have made a good attempt in developing arguments while keeping comparison between the two groups.

On the other hand, 25 is considered the right age to drive a car. P since/ as people of this age and above are more mature as opposed to people those below this age. Youngsters The latter group, (What does youngsters refer to?) being immature, sometimes indulge in rash driving which is the main reason for accidents, whereas adults the former, being more wise and experienced, are less likely to emit indulge in this kind of behaviour. (LR and CC issues in the previous sentence. Use latter/ former for referencing.) They are more concerned with the speed limits and are well aware of the consequences of exceeding the speed limit (the limit refers to speed limit mentioned earlier.) and breaking other road rules. The maturity of taking these rules into consideration comes with experience which is mostly achievable at this age only.

Good comparison between the two age groups.

In conclusion, teens (LR issue.) have the tendency to grasp new concepts more rapidly but at the same time, they lack concerns with the safety norms. In my opinion, 25 is the right age to drive cars as this age group being more wise firmly follows the rules.

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