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IELTS Essay Correction: Find A Way To Live With Climate Change.

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

40 minutes, 250 words at least.

Answer:

Climate change is the greatest threat to the earth these days. Some people believe that it is better to find another way to live with it than to prevent it. I completely disagree with this statement since it is too impractical and idealistic. (A well-written introduction. You’ve used to pronoun it to refer back to climate change. Also, you’ve mentioned the reasons that you plan to discuss in the body paragraphs.)

Firstly, people are living in the a climate crisis that will soon be out of control unless we take action to prevent it. The rising sea levels, which result from climate change, will soon makes the residents in low altitude areas submerge into water. If people do not try to prevent this from happening, this situation will become more dangerous. Eventually, the earth‘s lands will become uninhabitable. (The arguments are well-developed.) In this case, finding another way to live with climate change is completely impractical and useless. (Good comparison.) We should try to find a solution to stop this issue. Rather, we should actively search for solutions to prevent this impending disaster. 

Moreover, the idea that of trying to live in harmony with climate change is too unrealistic. No one can guarantee that a new way of life will be feasible and safe. It may merely , on the contrary, make the situation become (similar to make) risky. For example, the rising temperature makes the majority of people feel uncomfortable. Some people claim that we can simply turn on the air conditioners to live with growing temperatures and there is no need to find a way to prevent it. However, I believe that this method merely causes even more serious climate problems. This may result in ecosystem changes and the extinction of many species such as of crops, animals or birds even human. (Crops and animals are not species. They have numerous species within them.)

In conclusion, I believe that finding another way to live with climate change is useless and may bring more problems to the earth. People should only pay attention on to finding a way to prevent this from happening. 

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