Many parents today employ private tutors to teach their children after school hours. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
40 minutes, 250 words at least.
Parents often take help from private teachers to let their children study after school hours. (Alternate sentence: The trend of private tuitions is gaining popularity these days.) Since
private tutors they can provide various interesting and exciting ways of learning, it is advantageous for children to take private classes after school.
(Overuse of the word private in the introduction. Use pronouns to prevent this. The trend of private tuitions is gaining popularity these days. Since they provide alternate and interesting ways to learn concepts, they are immensely beneficial for children.)
Every child has a different pace of learning and some children often need more hours to understand
the a lesson in a classroom. Although teachers in school try to provide the best way of learning, some children find limitation in classroom training. Despite the best efforts of school teachers, they (refers to some children in the previous sentence) are unable to grasp the ideas and concepts. (DESPITE seems better than ALTHOUGH in this context. Avoid repetition of learning and classroom.) An extra hour from a tutor after school certainly helps them to pick up the lessons and be at the same level as with other students because expert knowledge from a personal tutor clears their doubts on time. (Nope. Your idea’s main theme is extra hour which is also the reason they hire tutors. It is given at the beginning of the sentence. You should not put another reason (expert knowledge) at the end of the sentence. Alternately, you can put both reasons at the same place. An extra hour from a private tutor coupled with her subject expertise helps them………)
Another benefit of a home tutor is the dedicated hour of learning. Nowadays, social media, television shows, and sports events create a distraction for children and
getting hiring a private teacher becomes the reason compels (forces) them to focus on study. Many private tutors not only help children them (note that I’ve used them to refer to children. Avoid repeating a noun.) to complete the school work but also give extra exercises to complete. Children They feel responsible to complete all the tasks assigned to them and they study hard for certain after-school hours in a day. My elder brother, who is a doctor by profession now, always had a private tutor after school to get deep knowledge of medical science and it really helped him to crack the medical college exams. (The arguments in this body paragraph are well built. The sentence structure also seems good. There are a few LR issues due to the repetition of nouns.)
To conclude, I support the idea of hiring a private tutor because it helps children to fathom complex topics after school training and they become dedicated to their study.