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IELTS Letter Correction: Neighbour’s Dog.

Your neighbor has a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep due to this.

Write a letter to your neighbors. In your letter:

  1. Describe the problem with the dog
  2. Explain why it is important for you to sleep
  3. Outline what your neighbor could do about the situation

Answer:

Dear Mr. Jackson,

I am writing to let you know (1) that your dog creates a huge disturbance at night as it barks all the time. I think you should do something because it’s it is a serious problem for me.

1. Most students begin the letter in this format. Though there is nothing wrong with this, examiners know that all students cram this pattern. This is, thus, not your natural/ original English and you will, surely, lose LR bands. Remember, this is your neighbor. You need not be too formal. Begin the letter in a friendly tone. 

Dear Mr. Jackson,

I loved having lunch with your family last week and enjoyed playing with Jaksy, your adorable dog. I can assure you that I love animals as much as you do. (These two sentences set the tone.) However, during the last few nights, she keeps barking at a high pitch and it has disturbed my sleep cycle. (One sentence is enough to mention the problem.)

The dog, which you recently brought, is highly noisy. (Okay, you’ve already said this in the introduction. Don’t repeat it. You can directly shoot. After my introduction, I will prefer to begin this paragraph as: The poor creature is perhaps feeling too lonely when your family falls asleep.) For some days I thought it feels alone, and will would (Wrong tense. Can you guess why?) stop barking when it (missing pronoun) become (wrong tense. Stick to the past tense.) known acquainted to this place. But the situation does did (wrong tense) not change, in fact, it has become worse.

(A lot of LR and GR mistakes. You will bleed bands!)

The noise directly comes to my room which is just opposite to the main gate of your house. I work all day at a private bank, for and (for does not make any sense) I need a sound sleep to keep my mind and body fresh. Such a loud noise makes me feel irritated not only at home but also at my workplace. (Some words are just unnecessary. I’ve struck them off.)

As you tie your dog near to the front gate, which opens in the a busy street, the dog it (Use a pronoun) starts barking on every vehicle that passes during night time. I think you should keep the dog at the backside of your house because it can easily (comfortably) sleep without causing making (there’s a huge difference between causing and makingany noise.

BP 2 and 3 are much better written than BP 1.

I hope you will understand my problem, (comma unnecessary) and take the required action.

Yours sincerely,

Amritpal Singh.

2 replies »

  1. Respected sirI am one of your bolg readers n learn from your correction letters.They r really a valuable source to improve writing skill.The letter you checked one correction made by you I couldn’t comprehend for grammar rules.I know you would be busy however ,if you get time kindly clear my doubt about I Second Paragraph Once it acquainted to this placeIn this sentence ,I thought there should be Once it would get acquainted But you mentioned past with V2HowKindly if you get time please explain.Thank you Yours sincerelyTejinder singh

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