Bullying is a big problem in many schools.

What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Answer:

Schools are supposed to be a safe haven for kids where they can express themselves without any fear. Sadly this has not been the case for many schools (do not repeat words. This impacts your LR score.) as bullying has been on the rise. One of the main reasons for bullying (word repetition) is not having a specific school body to deal with such issues where kids could maintain anonymity and report the case. (Let us reserve the explanation for body paragraphs.) The government should also strengthen the anti-bullying laws. In my opinion, spreading awareness about anti-bullying could really help in stopping bullying in schools.

The introduction is too long, it has simple sentences and there are too many word repetitions. This is likely to impact your LR and GR scores. Let us re-write it: “Schools are supposed to be a safe haven for kids where they can express themselves without any fear. Sadly, many of them fail to stop bullying partly due to absence of a school body to deal with the issue and partly due to weak anti-bullying laws. In my opinion, spreading awareness on the issue is the only solution.”

Many schools don’t have an anti-bullying body governed by the school staff itself which keeps a track of any kind of unwanted activity (This is not the same as bullying. This could also refer to the use of drugs in a school. LR issue.) taking place bullying on the campus. Due to this many cases of bullying go unreported as when kids go up to the teachers with a complaint (Incomplete sentence. When kids go to teachers, then WHAT happens?) they are often ignored. Usually, the perpetrator gets away with a small punishment that doesn’t stop him from bullying (Avoid word repetition) targeting the next kid. Also, the victim is in constant fear of being attacked by the same kid in revenge. The government should also strengthen any-bullying laws to ensure the safety of the school-going kids. (Whoa! If you raise an idea, explain it completely. Don’t leave it unexplained. This will impact your TR score.)

In my opinion, not enough awareness campaigns are being initiated by the government due to which bullying has been on the rise. No one likes to destroy their own (No one = singular; Their = plural. That’s incorrect. LR issue.) future (These should be two separate sentences. Read this again. GR issue. Sentence structure issue.) if there are enough awareness campaigns that enlighten the kids about the repercussions they could face and how their future could be destroyed due to a single act of stupidity, (Need a comma here.)it would definitely help in the reduction of cases.

To conclude, I would say that the government should step up its anti-bullying initiatives and take an active role with the (You’re not referring to a specific school. The use of THE is incorrect.) central school authority in ensuring no bullying takes place on the school campus. Bullying could scar a kids childhood and affect his overall abilities and confidence, and, therefore, it should be stopped. (…. and confidence; therefore, it should be stopped.)